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marguerite_26 ([personal profile] marguerite_26) wrote2009-02-19 10:24 am
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FIC: Unexpected, Harry/Scorpius

This is the third in my installments of quirky, fucked up, dark little ficlets for the clever people that guessed my [livejournal.com profile] hp_nextgen_fest fic.
The first two were:
BulletProof Teddy/James for [livejournal.com profile] snegurochka_lee
Crime and Punishment Draco/James for [livejournal.com profile] snarkyscorp

My muse is a bit twisted lately. So along the same lines, I give you:

Title: Unexpected
Rating/Warnings: NC-17, rimming, slight mindfuck, Age Desparity (40+/20)
Word Count: 1100
Pairing: Harry/Scorpius, Spoilery pairing: *Al/Scorpius*
Summary: One of Scorpius's many fantasies about Harry Potter comes to be, but it doesn't go as expected.
Author's Note: for [livejournal.com profile] nolagal for her excellent guessing skills. Prompt: Harry/Scorpius, shower. Thank you to [livejournal.com profile] softly_sweetly for the beta.



Unexpected

"Mind if I join you?"

I jump and I nearly lose my balance on the slippery shower floor. I throw a hand out to brace myself and with the other I cover my bits. After a deep breath, I turn to see the unexpected visitor. Harry fucking Potter is standing there, holding open the shower curtain. He is right there, getting Al's ratty bathrobe soaked as the spray catches his hand and rolls down his wrist. The threadbare cuff darkens as he waits for my answer.

"Scorpius?"

He doesn't have glasses on, I notice. In my fantasies he always has glasses on. That's my first clue. My second is that the words always come easily to me when I'm alone, my hands beneath the covers. He'd say something sexy and I'd say something clever. We'd smile and laugh and yeah, that'd be it for the foreplay. Never would he just stand there a little awkward, a little shy and just… wait. Mostly any hesitation that would sneak into my fantasies would be filled with one of us blurting out 'Can I suck your cock?' That always moved things along.

But Harry fucking Potter is – for real – waiting for me to say that 'something clever' and bloody hell if I can think of a single word to say.

"Er," he says, a little frustrated now. "Can I come in? I want to take a shower with you."

Wow. That was hotter than one would think.

"Merlin." My voice cracks. Twenty years old and my voice cracks over a two syllable word.

He looks a bit panicked. His eyes dart to the door and there is no way I'm going to let him leave. I step further into the shower to make room. Dialogue is overrated anyway. He slips Al's robe onto the floor and steps in beside me. We stare at each other's cocks for a minute.

He's hairier than I expected. I must have said that out loud because he chuckles and then he kisses me. He kisses me like he's fantasised about it at least as long as I have.

Harry fucking Potter's tongue is down my throat. The only thing better than that is his hand kneading my arse. My cock and his are both pretty keen. As I shift a bit to improve the angle of the snog, they knock together and fuck, yeah.

I tilt my head back and groan and get treated with a mouth full of water from the shower spray.

He pats my back until I stop coughing. That shit never happens in my fantasies. But he has lined up our cocks again and my mortification takes a holiday.

I've played every kink I know in my head over the years: mutual wanks and blowjobs, his cock up my arse and even mine up his (I blacked out after that wank). I want to know what he wants, what he needs because this is Harry fucking Potter and I used to sleep with his Chocolate Frog Card under my pillow.

I stop him from pulling my dick because, yeah – not going to last- and I ask, "How do you want me?" His eyes darken and I'm chuffed that I pulled off my rumbly-sexy voice this time.

He smiles and says, "Let's start with my tongue up your arse."

I whimper. Thank Merlin I wanked already this morning or I'd be spouting all over his hand right now.

He turns me around, spreads my legs and lifts one of my feet onto the side of the tub. Over my shoulder I see him drop to his knees. The shower is hitting my chest and rolling hot water down my cock. The second he spreads my cheeks, my knees give out and I thrust my hands out to the tiled walls.

His tongue swipes my hole and I cry out his name. Not the Mr. Potter I've being using since Al and I became friends, but Harry because he has his tongue in my arse, so I'm allowed.

He licks and sucks and kisses until I am whimpering. Then he starts to tongue fuck me and I'm so close but I don't dare let go of the wall.

"Harry, now, please. Fuck, now."

I think maybe I should have put up a Silencing Charm because Al might come home soon and find me and his dad 'breaking in' the loo. But fuck that. I can't think of anything but the amazing feeling going on in my arse.

"Harry!" I call out.

The door to the toilet bangs open. Fuck, I think. Al.

But when I turn, it's not Al. It's Harry. Mr. Potter. His eyes are wide as he looks at us – first me, then the person behind me. After a couple blinks, his cheeks turn red and his eyes narrow.

"What the FUCK!" I shout over my shoulder because the Harry in the shower has my arse still spread wide with his finger tips.

"Oh, God. Dad," the one behind me says. He lets go of my arse and fumbles to stand. "I'm – God – I'm so sorry."

"Al?" Mr. Potter says, not just a little horrified.

The one that is not Harry, reaches for Al's robe to cover himself.

I sink to the floor of the shower as it all clicks into place. That drunken conversation from a month ago, confiding one stupid fantasy to my flat-mate in moment of drunken loneliness. That funny hopeful look he'd given me, as if I hadn't just admitted I wanked over his father.

"Get out," I whisper and wrap my arms around my knees and tuck in my chin.

"Scorpius, I thought you realised–" my ex-best friend says and touches my shoulder, though his hands are not his own.

I don't look at him.

"Get the fuck out of here. Both of you!" My voice is raw and sharp. They leave then, but I can hear their not so quiet shouting match through the door.

I sit in the shower half listening, half in another world. I hear a muffled, 'I thought that's what he wanted'. My stomach lurches and I think I am going to vomit.

The water cascading over me has long since turned cold. I barely notice. I am numb.

~fin~



Also? [livejournal.com profile] nextgendarkfest!!!! Woot! I'm no sure I'm dark enough to write for it, but it will be on my reading list. Until it makes me cry. :D

[identity profile] geoviki.livejournal.com 2009-02-19 03:56 pm (UTC)(link)
Wow! Brilliant little story, both the idea and the execution. I was totally taken by surprise by that twist. It's the perfect length too, which is something I always have trouble figuring out for my own stories.

[identity profile] maja-li.livejournal.com 2009-02-19 04:06 pm (UTC)(link)
Oh, wow! That was wicked. Under more than one definition... Poor Scorpius--and poor Al!

Brilliant idea, brilliantly executed, darling

[identity profile] nolagal.livejournal.com 2009-02-19 04:09 pm (UTC)(link)
Oh no! I thought it might be since he was wearing Al's robe. Poor Scorpius how horrifying and disappointing and heartbreaking. *hugs him* also *hugs albus* for not being the right one, *hugs harry* because he's probably mortified and a little turned on. (ok, maybe my imagination is getting to me)
Fabulous! Thank you!!!!!

[identity profile] k8matty.livejournal.com 2009-02-19 04:26 pm (UTC)(link)
He pats my back until I stop coughing. That shit never happens in my fantasies.

I choked on my tea when I read that particular line.

Snerks and giggles aside, WOW that is one wonderfully dark ending! Jesus, you seriously took me from giggling and leering playfully to open-mouthed gaping.

Excellent little piece.

*begins the slow-clap*

[identity profile] bryoneybrynn.livejournal.com 2009-02-19 04:37 pm (UTC)(link)
OMG, I so didn't see that coming. That was fucking AWESOME! The sex was smoking and the twist was so well executed. Poor real Harry! And god, poor Scorp!!!

You can totally write for darkfest babe. Come on. The fluff ship has obviously sailed for you... ;)

[identity profile] luredbyvenus.livejournal.com 2009-02-19 04:39 pm (UTC)(link)
and then the shouting stops and both Harry and Al join Scorpius in the shower and make it up to him in every possible way, and two is always better than one anyway, the end.

There, all better. What? Not what happened? I can't hear you lalalalalalala.

(It was really very good. I didn't see it coming at all, and it made my stomach lurch right along with poor Scorpius.)

[identity profile] marguerite-26.livejournal.com 2009-02-19 05:32 pm (UTC)(link)
If I could write all my fics in 1-2k little bits I would be a happy camper. Something I can write in the time it takes me to drink a coffee. It's anything over 5k, I need like... a month. maybe two. All that plot and details and plot... yeah. I start to choke.

Anyhoooo... Thank so much for reading and commenting. I'm not sure how much you read cross gen, so I was totally chuffed to see this comment. :D

[identity profile] marguerite-26.livejournal.com 2009-02-19 05:33 pm (UTC)(link)
Thank you so much. I really hate to hurt those boys... but they do look awfully pretty crying in the shower. ;)

[identity profile] marguerite-26.livejournal.com 2009-02-19 05:37 pm (UTC)(link)
Nolagal!!! I hope you don't mind me taking your perfect PWP 'shower' prompt and turning out something a little nasty.

I thought it might be since he was wearing Al's robe.
I wanted to hint, but not to be too obvious.

Harry would of course me mortified and turned on. How could he not. This is SCORPIUS. ;)

thanks hun, I'm so glad you liked.
Edited 2009-02-19 17:38 (UTC)

[identity profile] marguerite-26.livejournal.com 2009-02-19 05:40 pm (UTC)(link)
hee!!! I made you laugh. That's awesome. *beams*

I was hoping to get people lost in the simple pwp of it, then pull the rug out. I'm thrilled that you enjoyed. ♥

[identity profile] nolagal.livejournal.com 2009-02-19 05:41 pm (UTC)(link)
Are you kidding? It was fabulous! I love what you did with it. Although nothing can be as prompt switching as what bryoneybrynn did with peanut butter.

[identity profile] marguerite-26.livejournal.com 2009-02-19 05:47 pm (UTC)(link)
hee! I haven't read it yet!!!!

I have it printed out to read this afternoon. :D

(and I'm behind on comments to your fic-spam! oh, that shower scene. yummy.)

[identity profile] marguerite-26.livejournal.com 2009-02-19 05:53 pm (UTC)(link)
Thank you so much!! I'm thrilled that you liked it. YAY!

OMG, I so didn't see that coming. YAY!!! I wasn't sure if I tipped my hat (tipped my hand??) too soon. Did you highlight the pairing? I'm curious if that ruins it.

Maybe I could write for the fest, but I'm afraid I might get kicked out if my request says "What you want to receive: please nothing too dark or too angsty. and I scare easily." :D
Maybe I'll pinch hit, so that no one has to write a 'not really dark' fic for the wuss.

[identity profile] marguerite-26.livejournal.com 2009-02-19 05:57 pm (UTC)(link)
It goes kinda like that in my mind too. Only maybe Al takes off and pouts somewhere and Harry comforts Scorpius and they drink firewhiskey (with Scorpius wrapped in a thick blanket by the fire) and talk about how long Scorpius has felt that way and were do they go from here. ;)

It all quiet and candle-lit and little painful but mostly healing. Then there is an awkward hug and a kiss on the cheek and it's wonderfully hopeful.

[identity profile] nolagal.livejournal.com 2009-02-19 05:57 pm (UTC)(link)
It's so good and sad, you'll love it. It was my favorite of her 3.

I'm glad you enjoyed my shower. there was some mistaken identity there too (just in a slightly less twisted way) *grins*

[identity profile] marguerite-26.livejournal.com 2009-02-19 06:00 pm (UTC)(link)
I did laugh at that similarity since I had just finished writing this one! I was like 'yay! she likes mistaken identities!' ;)

[identity profile] nolagal.livejournal.com 2009-02-19 06:01 pm (UTC)(link)
and cross-gen in showers, it's a great combination!

re: Unexpected

[identity profile] vaysh11.livejournal.com 2009-02-19 06:26 pm (UTC)(link)
Of course I should have known the second I read that "he's hairier than I expected", but it never occurred to me. I even read the highlighted spoiler (I always do that, can't resist), but never saw it coming *headdesk*. Very, very nice first-person Scorpius here, Rita!

[identity profile] luredbyvenus.livejournal.com 2009-02-19 06:30 pm (UTC)(link)
Oh, you are a romantic. *cuddles you*

H/C is my favorite genre so that totally works for me.

Have you read this? http://maculategiraffe.livejournal.com/10338.html It's the best H/C I've ever read. You should give it a try. :)

[identity profile] romaine24.livejournal.com 2009-02-19 06:32 pm (UTC)(link)
OMG you so got me on that one. That was awesome, dear. I feel sorry for all three of them.

And you know I smiled when I read. and I used to sleep with his Chocolate Frog Card under my pillow.

[identity profile] the-flic.livejournal.com 2009-02-19 06:45 pm (UTC)(link)
Oh fucking hell yes!!!! Absolutely adored this!! God, really loved it, well done!! xxx
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[personal profile] potteresque_ire 2009-02-19 07:07 pm (UTC)(link)
Ouch. This surprised me too ... I thought at least Scorpius and Al were together and so Scorpius wouldn't have mind .... and certainly didn't think Harry would drop by.

I can't imagine how they can sort this mess out :(

Oops I forgot to tell you that this is a very interesting read ... *Hugs you*
Edited 2009-02-19 19:07 (UTC)

[identity profile] piratesmile331.livejournal.com 2009-02-19 07:09 pm (UTC)(link)
WOW! Poor Scorpius, and poor Al. I feel bad for both of them (and Harry, to a minor extent).
Just so you know, Maggie, your dialogue and Scorpius-voice are getting better and better with each fic. Not that they were ever not good, but they're just fantastic now. You do the first person so well.

Loved these bits: He pats my back until I stop coughing. That shit never happens in my fantasies. But he has lined up our cocks again and my mortification takes a holiday.

I want to know what he wants, what he needs because this is Harry fucking Potter and I used to sleep with his Chocolate Frog Card under my pillow.

I sink to the floor of the shower as it all clicks into place. That drunken conversation from a month ago, confiding one stupid fantasy to my flat-mate in moment of drunken loneliness. That funny hopeful look he'd given me, as if I hadn't just admitted I wanked over his father.


Great work, dear.



[identity profile] goddessriss.livejournal.com 2009-02-19 07:09 pm (UTC)(link)
Perfectly formed, fan-fecking-tastic fic. Just the right amounts of heat and angst. Poor, poor Scorp. You kill me.

[identity profile] piratesmile331.livejournal.com 2009-02-19 07:23 pm (UTC)(link)
Yes, yes, YES!!! You must write this now!!!

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